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湖北省高考满分作文：（03全国卷）话题“感情亲疏与认知的关系”
路是月的痕
依稀想来，已有几年未踏上这一条洒满月光的小路了。小路是父亲亲手用鹅卵石铺成，在月下泛着朦胧柔和的光。路的那头，连着那河边的小屋，连着我的父亲。父亲呵，你是否依然执着地坐在岸边，哀怨地吹着笛子，等着儿子的归来？ 父亲爱好吹笛。小的时候，父亲的笛声载满了我童年的乐趣，像那条丝带一样的小河，牵引着我的童心在父亲爱的港湾里晃悠。父亲很疼我这个惟一的儿子，老喜欢用粗糙的双手捏我的脸蛋，不顾我疼得哭起来，还兀自傻呵呵地笑。每天日暮，父亲带我到河边的草地上放牛。父亲常常放开牛绳让牛自己吃草，自己便从背后的草篓里摸出笛子，鼓起腮，吹出世间最美妙的音乐。我就靠在父亲腿上，看着天边的夕阳将父亲的头发染上点点金色。我爱父亲，父亲的笛声最美。 随着年龄的增长，我开始讨厌起父亲，讨厌他满嘴烟味，讨厌他的黄牙；讨厌他背个草篓到学校找我，还从窗外傻傻地盯着我看，我还讨厌他没有本事，只知侍弄几亩薄地，连我的学费也没能赚回。我和父亲逐渐隔膜了。在被我吼了几次后，父亲不再打着赤脚去学校看我，不再唠叨着让我好好学习。他保持沉默，而打破沉默的惟一方式就是吹笛，如怨如慕，而在我看来，这又成了不务正业的标志。
我到外地上学去了。离去的前一天晚上，我走上那条熟悉的小路，感觉到一丝眷恋与不舍。路像是月光在地上划过的痕，也划过我的心。几年时间里，我未回过一次家。母亲在电话里告诉我，我走后，父亲整日像掉了魂似的，茶饭不思，只知去河边吹笛子。最终，我应母亲的请求回到了家。到家里已是夜晚，月刚升起，当我怀着无尽的思绪在小路上行走时，遇到了等我的父亲。我忽地一下子哭出来，紧紧抱住了父亲。我请求父亲给我吹笛，父亲答应了。哽咽的笛声又在耳畔响起，响在洒满月光的小路上，勾起我的回忆。我感觉到父亲眷眷的爱子之情，感到愧对父亲的笛声，父亲爱我，爱着自己的儿子。他为我吹了十八年的笛子，而我此刻才发现它和我的心竟产生如此强烈的共鸣。
路很美，很美，是月划过的痕。月是路的魂，父亲的笛声是我的心魂！
【点评】“感情亲疏与认知的关系”，这本是具有很强思辩性的话题，本文却对这一话题作了含蓄而形象的诠释：儿时爱父亲，其笛声最美，年龄稍长时厌父亲，吹笛被看作“不务正业”；到外地求学时复苏了爱父的情感，其笛声与我的心产生强烈的共鸣———“我”对笛声的认识就是这样受着感情的支配！
文中月、路与笛声既构成了朦胧而静美的如诗的意境，又成了结构全文的线索。特别是笛声，既是父亲情感的宣泄，又是“我”认知的对象，还是刻画“父
亲”性格的道具。父亲带“我”放牛时用笛声抒发“美妙”，父亲与“我”有隔膜时用笛声传达“爱子之心”。
本文语言优美而形象，“路是月的痕”，月是路的魂，多么新奇而富有诗意的比喻！“用粗糙的手捏我的脸蛋”，“兀自傻呵呵地笑”，“讨厌他满嘴烟味，讨厌他的黄牙，讨厌他背个草篓到学校找我„„”细节的白描与排比的辞格，刻画出“父亲”的质朴、憨厚、隐忍、痴心的性格特征，蕴含着浸渍乡村风味的浓浓亲情，不乏感人的力量。
综上所述，本文不失为文质兼美，耐人咀嚼的记叙散文，被评分满分作文应当之无愧。
07高考山东作文题目：
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母亲手中的稻草绳
就在昨晚我还伸手摸了摸枕下的稻草绳，胸中的热血流遍全身„„
母亲啊，您可曾知您坐在门前编制稻草绳，那蓝布褂，那双敏捷而勤快的手将稻草一颠一颠地编成草绳——那幅画面伴随了我十几个春秋啊，母亲啊，那是永不褪色的记忆，伴我一年又一年„„
还记得你那次生病，恰好我放假回家，父亲给了我一把零钱，让我给您买点您爱吃的菜。我低着头行走在人群中，带着上次考试的悲伤，走得缓缓的，在这喧闹的市场上，我无心观察周围形形色色的人，只顾伤心地走着„„偶尔间，抬头望望菜堆，寻找你爱吃的菜。其实我根本没曾想过，你爱吃什么，只是记得您爱吃我爱吃的菜„„又是偶尔抬头，老伯在用稻草绳绑着菜，那好熟的稻草绳„„这不是母亲一直编着的稻草绳吗？母亲您那单薄的身体倚在门前，手一颠一颠地将稻草编成绳子„„
还记得那个夜晚吗？天黑黑的，父亲在屋内抽着闷烟，烟雾缭绕，您依旧在门外编着草绳，手一颠一颠的，稻草就编成草绳。我的心沉沉的，再也无力开口要开学后的学费„„
时间好像在那一刻停留，静得可怕，就如我沉沉的心。那句“爸妈，我不上了”在口中转了几圈又咽了回去，只有我自己知道，我对学习是多么渴望，可家中„„母亲，您的手依旧在一颠一颠地将稻草编成绳的一部分。父亲猛地捏灭了烟，起身去了邻家，我依旧心沉沉的，您依旧手一颠一颠地将稻草编成草绳„„
我回过神来，匆匆地买了您应该爱吃的菜，不忘要了根草绳„„
母亲啊，我就是您手中的草绳，从小编到大„„您那在门口编草绳的背影，那双一颠一颠的双手在我的记忆里永不褪色。
后来求学的路上，我总不忘将一根草绳放在枕下，看到它，我就看到了您的身影，您那双永不停息的手，和那一颠一颠的稻草绳，走过了一年又一年„„您用那双手告诉了我什么是自强不息„„
我在您的那双手下成长，同稻草一样由草变绳„„您的那双手陪我走过了一夜又一夜，时间永远吹不落您手中的稻草绳，更吹不落那双一颠一颠的手„„
09福建卷
题目：这也是一种
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这也是一种爱
昏暗的灯火下一对父子正在吃饭，安静的饭桌上父亲面无表情，静静地吃着碗里的饭。儿子小心翼翼地观察着自己的父亲，不远处的书包里静静地躺着这次测验的卷子。79分的卷子既不算好也不算太差，但是对一向成绩优秀的儿子来说，就有点失水准了。 “这次考得怎么样了？”良久，沉默是金的父亲终于发话了。
“7„„79分。”无法从父亲的语气中感受到任何感情的儿子小心回答了父亲的提问，并紧紧盯着父亲那张好像盤石般坚毅的脸。
没有表情！即使是听到儿子成绩下降的时候，那张熟悉的脸庞就像一潭死水一样波澜不惊。看到这里，儿子有些失望地低下了头，默默吃着碗里的饭。
曾几何时，父亲会对自己的成功感到欣慰，会为自己的失败而感到可惜，父子俩一起高兴一起伤心，可是现在的父亲„„脸上麻木的表情，没有丝毫的感情，儿子的成败仿佛跟他没有关系一样。
多少次儿子拿着第一的成绩在父亲面前炫耀，父亲也仅仅只有一声简简单单的回应。同学们所说的进步的奖励、成功的庆祝，这一切儿子都不曾拥有。同时，同学们所说的父母对成绩下降的怒火、严厉的呵责，到了父亲这里连一个简单的表情也换不到。想到这里，儿子不禁有些神伤。
又是一阵无言的沉默，只有咀嚼下咽的声音。
忽然父亲放下碗筷，儿子有些惊喜地抬头。“你想吃些什么？我明天去买。”父亲没头没尾的话语让儿子有些惊讶，木然的回答之后，又是一阵可怕的沉默。
儿子低头细想父亲刚才的话：这是在关心我吗？如此简单的话语让儿子难以抓住其中的意义。
望着父亲起身离去的背影，儿子有些茫然。看着洗碗池前父亲忙碌的背影，儿子忽然觉得有种想哭的冲动，眼泪在眼眶中直打转。也许吧，这就是父亲关心人的方式！虽然很简单，也很容易伤人，但这也是一种爱吧！儿子忽然觉得父亲的表情不再木讷了，像死水一样的父亲仿佛又增添了新的活力。儿子赶紧上前与父亲并肩站在一起，帮他洗碗。忽然儿子好像看到父亲笑了，笑得像铁树开花一样灿烂。
这也是一种爱，饭桌上无言的爱。
09江苏卷：（７０分）
时尚表现为服饰、语言、文艺等方面的新奇事物在一定时期内的模仿和流传。各种时尚层出不穷，其间美与丑、雅与俗、好与坏，交错杂陈。创新与模仿永不停息地互动，有些时尚如过眼云烟，有些时尚会沉淀为经典。
请以"品味时尚"为题写一篇不少于800字的文章。
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品味时尚
江苏考生
(一)
“一代不如一代！”九斤老太愤愤地小声嘀咕着，一边不自觉地又朝右边小木椅上忘我拥吻的情侣瞥了一眼，便像犯了罪似地收回了目光。
伊眼见着街头闪烁的标语——“情侣街，品味衣，品味时尚，有爱大声喊出来！”伊吓了一大跳，慌忙朝出口走去，喃喃道：“品味啥时尚？我们那时啊，挑开头盖才知道新娘啥模样啊！真是一代不如一代！”
(二)
九斤老太是怎么会认字的呢？哈哈，自从孙女七斤在城里当上了《品味时尚》杂志的主编，九斤老太便经常来城市探望。七斤本想给老太报个老年大学，把老太吓了个半死，伊连忙摆手：“男男女女共处一室，都是有孙儿辈的人，怎么行呢？哎，真是一代不如一代哪！”好在九斤老太耳聪目明，七斤便教她学字念报，本看在伊很用心，便准备将最新潮的“火星文”一并教授给老太。却不料九斤老太脸上的皱纹都拧在了一处，撇着伊的瘪嘴骂道：“祖宗之字不可乱改，我们那里谁敢乱改？哎，真是一代不如一代！”
(三)
这天，七斤没事做，便从口袋中拿出《品味时尚》杂志，嚷嚷着要给九斤老太念一段文章。
老太的瘪嘴鼓了鼓，终没叨咕出一句话，便坐下听孙女读。
“38度的阳光温柔地在我微闭的睫毛上跳跃”，七斤声情并茂地读着，又不禁自我陶醉地闭上双眼。“啥玩意儿？”九斤老太几乎觉得自己耳朵坏了。
“我的嘴角上扬，不禁定格成43°的微笑”，七斤自然不理会老太的问题，继续半读半诵。“瞎折腾！”老太不屑地耸了耸肩。
“空气中弥漫着78°摩卡或68°卡布奇诺的芬芳„„”七斤略略不舍地放下杂志，期待着伊的夸赞。听得一头雾水的老太，看着孙女的眼神，局促不安起来，想了半天，还是将口头禅涌了出来：“哎呦，一代不如一代哪！”
“什么什么呀！这叫‘小资文’，这叫时尚，教您品味时尚你都不会！”七斤脸上露出不屑的神气。
(四)
“奶奶！您太时尚了！城里现在都流行吃您那种玉米窝窝头，拎你那破蛇皮口袋，尤其是您那句‘一代不如一代’，火了！火了！”七斤兴奋地在电话里嚷嚷，“您现在有空教我品味时尚啊！”
九斤老太脸上露出不可置信的神色，望着破旧瓷碗中的几个硬面窝窝头，又浮想到七斤衣服上故意张开的破洞洞，本想骂句“真是一代不如一代”，忽地又想到这又成了时尚，伊觉得不合身份，思来想去，一句话也说不出，便默默挂了电话。
伊失了神，心理叨咕：品味时尚，真是„„
【简评】文章凭借“九斤老太”生发出意趣横生的故事，善于反讽。惊看街头“时尚”，难舍老年“时尚”，不解文学“时尚”三个片段，着力描绘“不合时宜”的“九斤老太”的鲜活形象。文末出人意料，“守旧”的九斤老太太竟成“时尚”，赋予了“一代不如一代”这经典语言在当今时尚中新的深刻内涵。文
导学思范文：（一）写地方
Hainan Island is in the south of our country. On the island, you can enjoy bright sunshine, fresh air and beautiful sights. You will never forget that. Hai Kou city is the capital of Hainan Province and it is also the biggest city on the island. You can visit the flower markets or enjoy the delicious seafood there. You can find many beautiful beaches. People love walking along the seaside or swimming in the sea. There are many tall coconut trees by the sea. Welcome to Hainan Island! I’m sure you will have a good time.
(二)规章
Fellow students,
Here are some class rules for us. I hope all of us obey them.
1. Don’t be late for class.
2. Don’t listen to music in class.
3. Don’t eat anything in the classroom.
4. Don’t run in the hallway.
5. Don’t fight with others.
6. Wear sports shoes in PE class.
7. Wear school uniforms at class meeting.
8. Don’t swim in the river or in the pool.
(三)请假条
Dear Miss Lin,
I’m sorry that I can’t go to school today. I’m not feeling well. I have a bad cold. I have a fever, a headache and a running nose. I went to see a doctor. The doctor gave me some medicine and I have to take it three times a day after meals. The doctor told me to drink enough water and stay in bed for three days.
So I need to ask for three days’ leave from school.
Thank you!
Yours sincerely,
Li Ming
(四)捐款号召
The students in Class 1, Grade 8 plan to organize a charity activity. It will be held on October 1st. They want to help the children in poor areas return to school. They will invite the middle school students all over the city to take part in this charity activity. The students have to finish walking 15 kilometers within two hours. They hope this activity will make the middle school students not only work harder, but also have a good health and more people will raise money for charity.
(五)环保建议
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am a middle student. I have learned from the newspaper that you are going to build a factory in my hometown. It’s good for the development of my hometown and it will provide us with more jobs. Most of us support the program. However, some of us are worried that the factory will make much noise and pollute the environment of the area. I would like to know if you have any plans to protect the environment. Would you please offer us more information about it?
I’m looking forward to hearing from you.
Yours sincerely,
Zhang Hua
(六)自荐信
Dear chairman,
I’m a boy student from Class 1, Grade 3. I’d like to be a member of the Helping Hands Club.
I’m healthy. I work hard at my lessons. I like helping others. I get on well with my classmates and often help them with my classmates and often help them with their lessons. On my way home, I often help old people cross the street. On the bus, I always give my seat to woman with babies. Sometimes, I pick up rubbish in the park.
If I join the club, I will be able to make more friends. Besides, I can do more for others.
I will be happy if I’m received. I am waiting for your answer.
Yours,
Wang Lin
(七)保持健康
The Best Way to Keep Healthy
It’s very important for us to keep healthy in our everyday life. But how can we stay healthy? Here is some advice for you to follow:
First you should have a healthy diet. It’s necessary to eat plenty of fruit and vegetables. You shouldn’t eat too much cheese, butter or anything else fatty. Eating too many sweets can be bad for your teeth. You should drink as little coffee as possible.
Second you should go to bed on time. Don’t stay up too late. Sleeping for about 8 hours a night is good for our health. Don’t forget to get up early and do exercising.
Finally, don’t work too hard. You should try to relax yourself. You can go out for a walk or do some other sports.
(八)怎样和别人相处
How to Get on Well with Others
As we know, students should learn how to get on well with others. But what can we do?
First of all, we should respect(尊重) others. Everybody has his or her own way to do things, so we should understand each other. Besides, it’s important for us to communicate with each other and share(分享) our happiness and sadness. What’s more, we should be kind to others and offer necessary help to those who are in trouble.
In my opinion, we should treat others in an honest way. Only in these ways can we get along well.
(九)健康的饮食
Healthy Eating
We can’t live without food. However, some unhealthy food will be bad for our health, besides healthy food can give us much energy. So healthy eating is important.
In order to eat healthy food every day, we must have good eating habits. Keeping a balanced diet is a good way. We should drink milk and eat eggs. It’s good to eat more vegetables and fruit instead of meat. We’d better not eat junk food. Healthy eating habits can make our body strong so that we can keep illness away. It’s good for our health.
(十)网购优缺点
With the development of the internet, many people are used to shopping on line. And now more and more students are shopping on line.
Shopping on the internet has a lot of advantages. First we can buy things without going out. Then we won’t feel tired. The shops won’t be much too crowded. The price of the goods on line is usually lower than that in the stores. There are many kinds of things on the internet.
But it also has its disadvantages. First we can’t see the goods. Second we may buy something we don’t need and waste lots of money.
适应性检测(一) 升学烦恼
Dear Ms Lin,
I’m very glad to write to you. I have a lot of troubles these days. Every day I have a lot of homework to do at school. I don’t have enough time to sleep. I nearly have no time to do sports. My friends and I can hardly find time to talk or play together. When I get back home from school, I’m not allowed to watch TV, surf the internet or listen to my favorite music. I feel worried about them. I don’t know what I should do. Could you please give me some advice?
Best wishes!
Li Chen
适应性检测(二)我新学校的生活
My New School Life
We are senior school students now. As member of the school, we should love our school and follow the school rules. We are supposed to study hard and do well in all subjects. We should love our teachers and be polite to others. We also need to help and learn from each other. It’s important for us to do exercise and keep healthy. I think it’s our duty to keep our school clean and tidy. If everyone do something useful to the school, it will be more beautiful. I’m sure I will enjoy my new school life.
适应性检测(三)我们需要运动吗？
Do We Need Sports
Every day we have little time for sports because we have too much homework to do. Our parents usually keep us studying because they think that doing exercise is wasting time. In their opinion, we don’t need exercise because we are healthy enough. But in fact, they don’t know that we are often tired and sleepy after a long time of studying. Some of us even feel bored in our lessons. So it’s necessary for us to take exercise. I think we must have at least one hour to exercise every day. Doing sports is a good way to relax ourselves and keep fit. What’s more, a healthy body can keep us study better and live a happier life.
适应性检测(四)我的新学校
Dear Mum and Dad,
Time flies! I’ve been here for nearly a year. I’m very pleased to find that our school is really a good one. The students in our school work hard at their lessons. They take an active part in activities that help to improve their grades and keep healthy. And many of them have all kinds of hobbies and interests. They are friendly to each other and always ready to help others.
The teachers all enjoy their work and they love their students. They work hard and do what they can do to encourage their students. And the students respect their teachers. They get on well with each other. The students in our school try their best to keep the school yard clean and tidy. They never drop litter or pick the flowers.
In a word, I’m impressed by everything in this school. I love my new school.
Yours,
Tom 直通车(一)好友的网瘾问题
Dear Jim,
I really feel worried about you. You used to do well in your lessons and took part in activities at school. But now you are so crazy about computer games that you have no interest in your schoolwork and don’t listen to teachers carefully in class. You can’t hand in your homework on time.
Perhaps playing computer games can make you feel relaxed, but if you spend too much time on it, you will have less time to study. And it’s bad for your health. For example, it can hurt your eyes and neck.
I hope you can get over it. Why not join in some outdoor activities when you feel bored? As your friend, I want to share your happiness and sadness.
Yours,
Li Hua 直通车(二)安全驾驶
How to drive safely
Nowadays, more and more families have cars. At the same time there are lots of car accidents every day.
So in order to protect you and others, you should obey the following (rules) when you are driving: First you shouldn’t drive your car after drinking wine. If you really need to drink some, you can take a taxi or a bus to the restaurant or home；Then you’d better not drive tiredly. When you feel tired, you can stop your car to have a rest; next don’t use your phone when you are driving; and finally you should slow down when you see someone walking on the road.
If all the drivers can remember these, there will be fewer car accidents.
直通车(三)梦想的家园
My Dream Home
Hi, everyone! The flood washed away our house, but I was very lucky to stay alive with my family. Today I want to tell you my dream home.【初中记叙文范文,】
My new house is across from a park and I can hear birds sing happily every day. There are two rooms in my new home and I live in the same room with my brother. There is a football field in front of my house. After school, I can play football with my friends there. It’s far away from the big cities, so the air is fresh and clean. It takes me 5 minutes to walk to school.
That’s my dream home. I’m looking forward to having it one day!
直通车(四)母亲节
Dear mother,
Mother’s Day is coming. I’d like to say something to you. You always work hard so that I can live a better life and get a better education. You are strict with me in my study and help me with my homework. When I failed an exam, you encouraged me to be confident and keep trying. When I had trouble in life, you always told me to be brave and face the challenges with smile.
You have given me so much, not only in my study but also in my life. Thank you for your deep love. Thank you for all you have done for me. I love you! I hope you will be healthy and happy forever!
Happy Mother’s Day!
Yours,
Li Ping
直通车(五)我的升学烦恼
The senior school Entrance Examination is coming, we are studying hard to prepare for it.
We have too much homework to do every day, so we are stressed out. But we shouldn’t complain, we shouldn’t give up any subject. Because we don’t have enough sleep, we should learn to make full use of time and don’t stay up too late. Some of us are in poor health because we have no time to do sports. I think we should exercise for half an hour every day and eat healthy food.
直通车(六)怎样成为好孩子
How to be a good child
Nowadays, how can we be a good child? At school, I think you should work hard and respect teachers. Also, you should get on well with your classmates. Listen to your teacher carefully. At home, you can help your mother do housework, such as cleaning the house, washing the clothes and so on. You should communicate with your parents. Don’t make them angry. As a good child, you should take part in outdoor activities. When someone is in trouble, you should cheer them up. Try these; you will be a good child.
直通车(七)九年级学生应该做日常锻炼
Students in Grade Nine Should Do Everyday Exercise
I believe it’s necessary for students to do everyday exercise.
Everyday exercise can bring many advantages. First, it can make us relaxed. We have too much pressure at school or at home. Doing exercise every day can take the pressure away. Second, it’s also good for our health and we can be better at our schoolwork when we’re healthier. Third, we can make more friends when we play with others. Fourth, we all know P.E. grades are more and more important for students. How can we get good grades in P.E. without enough exercise?
But some students disagree with me. They think that doing everyday exercise will waste time. They will feel tired after doing lots of exercise. So it can influence our study. Do you think so? Please tell me about your opinions. 直通车(八)暑假安排
The summer holiday is coming. Our class has a discussion about what to do during the holiday.
Some prefer to stay at home. They think it’s both convenient and comfortable. What’s more, they can save some money to do other things.
But they will lose the chance of getting to know the outside world.
However, others would rather go out to travel than stay at home. They think it can open their eyes and learn about more knowledge. But they will also spend more money and meet more difficulties while travelling.
In my opinion, I would like to stay at home; I really need to relax myself. So I can do what I like to do, such as reading books, watching TV, and helping my parents with the housework. How about your plan?
一人一事
沐浴阳光
在回家的路上，我常常会看到一位修车的叔叔，即使再热的天气里，他也是坐在那里，帮别人修着车子。他的摊位几乎占据了整个人行道，与现代的的城市文明有点格格不入。 他上身穿着暗黑色的短袖军服，下面穿着一条早已看不出什么颜色的长裤，脚蹬着一双黑布鞋。他瘦得皮包骨头，肤色黝黑，感觉脏兮兮的。所以每次从那经过，都不禁加快脚步。
一天中午，我骑着自行车去上学。忽然，只听“嘭”的一声响。我急忙下车一看，只见我的前车胎瞬间扁了下去。这下我可急了。心想，公交车太慢；跑过去又怕晚点。这可怎么办呢？我便焦急地向四处看。忽然想起那位修车的叔叔就在附近。无奈之下，只好去找他看看。
正在这时，天下起了小雨。我推着车子向叔叔那跑去。到了面前，看到修车的叔叔正要收拾工具准备回家。我急忙喊道：“叔叔，等一下，我车子坏了。”
叔叔抬头看了看窘迫的我，又看了看天，说道：“好吧，我给你看看。”
“谢谢。”我高兴地说。
看着叔叔认真帮我修着车子，雨滴一点点浸透了他身上的衣服。我想起之前头脑里那些不该有的想法，便有些不好意思。
叔叔用他那粗黑的手卸下自行车带，用手指仔仔细细地摸了一圈外胎内测，发现一颗小小的铁钉子。他肯定地说：“是铁钉扎带了。”他又给
内胎充气，后将内胎缓缓放入盛满水的脸盆中，
他发现内胎被铁钉扎破的小洞。他便拿出工具一丝不苟地补这个洞。
雨水滴落在他的脸上，我更加愧疚了。 不一会儿，他便站起身，对我说：“修好了。” 此时的我突然注意到，他的背竟然有点驼。以前听爸爸说起过这位修车的叔叔，他是一个下岗工人。我瞬间感到了他生活的的辛苦，也想到了自己的父亲和他渐渐变白的鬓角，鼻子陡然一阵酸。
他在收拾工具。这时，雨停了，太阳也出来了。阳光是那么的明媚，那么的温暖。
我歉意地说：“谢谢叔叔。”一摸口袋，瞬间不知所措了。
叔叔看到我有些不对劲，就问道：“怎么了？” “我，我„„”我尴尬得不知说什么好，“我，我没带钱！”
“哦，没事，一点小毛病，不用给钱了。快走吧，别晚了上学。”
“谢谢叔叔!”
一股暖流温暖了全身。啊，我沐浴了温暖的阳光。
一人多事
沐浴春雨，享受父爱
记得初一下学期冬末春初的一天。天已渐黑，我手中拿着一张不及格的卷子，垂头丧气地走在回见的路上，回想着老师的批评、同学的讥笑，心中竟有些恼羞成怒。
一回到家，就看见父亲斜坐在沙发上，双眼和脸颊因酒精而显得殷红。他可能是听见开门的声音，缓缓地抬起头，说：“怎么才回来？考试成绩怎么样阿？”
我讨厌父亲喝酒的样子，便很不耐烦地说：“没考好。倒是看看你，喝得那个样子。”说完，便把试卷随手放在桌子上，进了自己的房间。
“你这孩子什么态度啊？”父亲说，“我整天辛苦的忙，不就是为了你啊？”
没等父亲说完，我就忍不住说道：“你以为我愿意啊，考不好难道我开心吗？”
过了几天，我对妈妈说想一个人出去旅游。母亲只是说，去散散心也好。虽然父亲什么也没说，但我想，他是知道的，我想参加旅游团就是想避开他几天。
短短的周末一日游，很快就要结束了。当乘坐巴士返回时，已是傍晚，看看窗外飘着细雨时，我才发现，出门时忘记了带雨具！巴士到站后，我不得不下车。
雨依旧密密地斜织着，我正焦急如何回去，忽地听到“滴滴”的汽车喇叭声，仔细一看，那不就是父亲的车吗？父亲很快拿着雨具从车里出来，跑到我面前。
父亲一边给我撑伞一边说道：“玩得还好吧？，快上车吧，车上暖和，妈妈还在车上等着你呢。”他又把一件揣在他怀里的大衣披在我的身上，我轻轻地的“嗯”了一声，算是回答了。
我走向车时，看着父亲的衣角湿透了，心里掠过一丝
愧疚。
到了车上，父亲才脱下湿漉漉的衣服来，这时，车上的母亲说道：“你爸啊，看了天气预报，说今天有雨。说你出门走得急，没带雨具。非要早早地就拉着我来了，说是怕来晚了，你会淋雨感冒的。”
我爸听母亲这么说，好像有点烦了，说：“你叨叨啥，真是的，再说，疼自己家的孩子有什么不对吗？” 父亲摸了一下我的脑袋。我看了一眼正准备开车的父亲，眼角上刻满了“生”字，鬓角已经全白了。我鼻头陡然一阵酸，眼睛湿润了。
“好孩子，好好学习，不要和你爸似的，啊。”父亲宽慰我说。
“我——我。”我抽噎着再也说不出一句话来。从那一刻开始，我已经决定，回去以后，做一个不再让父亲操心的乖儿子。
车窗外的雨依旧下着，轻轻地敲打着车窗，在耳边发出清脆的响声。我突然感觉自己做了一件最傻的事：曾经拒绝自己最渴望得到的父爱。或许杜甫的“润物细无声”就是对父爱最好的诠释吧。
沐浴春雨，享受父爱吧。
初中记叙文写作教案
【课文类型 】
讲述型
【课 时】
一个小时左右
【教学目标】
1、了解记叙文含义，学生可以自己概括记叙文的含义。
2、初步掌握记叙文文体特点，及一般构成要素。
3、明确记叙文写作思路及写作技巧。
4、能对一篇成文的记叙文的艺术价值作简单评价。
5、练习写记叙文，记叙文主题可以根据课题学生情况再定。
【教学重点难点】
教学重点
1、让学生掌握记叙文的构成要素。
2、让学生初步掌握记叙文的写作技法。
教学难点
1、通过分析记叙文写作的基本要素让学生明确记叙文要如何构思，如何去写。
【教学方法】
合作探究法
【教学过程】
1、导入
（1）明确“记叙”（可以鼓励学生根据自己对记叙文的理解来描述记叙文的内涵）【初中记叙文范文,】
记叙文：记叙文是文体的一种。是运用语言文字将关于人或不关于人的某一事件或某一现象发生的前因，经过，结果描述出来。在该叙述过程中包含了叙述者对该事件或现象的理解和情感。
（2）生活处处有“记叙”
（举例）《新闻联播》是学习写记叙文最好的教材。《新闻联播》对每个事件的报道在技
术层面上非常好。
2、介绍记叙文的文体构成要素（可与学生进行讨论)
（1）叙述：把人物的经历和事物的发展变化过程表达出来的一种表达方式。它是写作 中最基本、最常见、也是最主要的表达方式。
（2）描写：是对人物的外貌、动作、事物的性质、形态和景物的状貌，变化所作的具 体刻画和生动描摹。 （3）说明：是用简明的语言、客观而准确地解说事物或阐述说事理的一种表达方式。
（4）抒情:是作者通过作品中心人物表达主观感受，倾吐心中情感的文字表露，可分为 直接抒情、间接抒情两种。直接抒情即直抒胸臆。间接抒情是在叙述、描写、 议论中流露出爱憎感情。
（5）议论：根据作品写出自己的见解或道理.
3、如何运用记叙文的构成要素，写一片好的记叙文
（1）、先欣赏一篇文章
生 日
此时此刻，我已不能压抑我心中的喜悦，不知道今天妈妈爸爸会送给我什么礼物。放学后，我背起书包一溜烟地冲回了家。来到家门口，我本想拿起钥匙打开门。如果爸爸妈妈提前回了，在家里摆了个大蛋糕，桌子上有好多好多礼物。就想给我个大惊喜。我这样开门，万一搅了局，可怎么办？虽知道这只有百分之零点几的机会。但我还是把钥匙拿回了衣袋。郑作其事地敲着门，说说：“妈妈，我回来了。”过了会儿没有动静，可能他们还忙着收起礼物吧，我整了整衣领，又敲了敲，不知过了多久，我才醒悟过来，这只是我的一个幻想。
我无力地打开了门，坐在了沙发上，望了望钟，才6点，早在学校就把作业写完了的我现在不知要干什么，不禁仰天长叹：“无聊啊！”
一阵声音把我从无聊中拉了回来，呀！是不是妈妈爸爸回来了，才不是呢，是我这不争气的肚子。好吧，今天我这“寿星”也来大干一场。说不定，爸妈还会夸奖我，想着便冲进厨房，把门一关：油炸声，油烟机声，咳嗽声，锅铲声，一时其发。望着这好不容易炒出的饭菜，我有点伤心，都七点了。怎么他们还没回，对平时来讲，打110报警失踪都不足为奇。更何况，今天是他们女儿的生日。我慢慢地拔通了电话：“喂？”听到妈妈的声音，可真开心！“妈妈„„”我还没讲完，里面传来了妈妈急切的声音：“女儿，我现在还在厂里，今天要加班，爸爸出差了，你自已搞饭吃，啊！对了，今天是你的生日，爸爸妈妈祝你生日快乐！”
我没什么好讲的，双方都挂了电话。今天的菜，不知怎么的无论放多少的蚝油，都没有味道。要睡觉了我拖着拖鞋一路拖到房间，突然有个念头，不如钻进被窝里大哭一场。但那泪水是咸的，还是没有味道呢？我坐在床边，掀开被子，突然看见里面有一个盒子。，上面写着：生日快乐。里面还有一个图画册，十分地漂亮，上面署名：爸爸妈妈送，琳收。这时，带着咸味的泪水终于涌了出来。有一句话，说得很好：当你认为爸爸妈妈不爱你的时候，请拿出你的手，摸摸你的左心房，是谁给了你心脏的跳动。
（2）、通过对上文的阅读，（和同学讨论）概括上述记叙文较突出的地方：
A、留心观察，注意积累生活素材。
B、把事件、人物要写得具体典型。
C、材料详略得当具有典型性，最能表现文章主旨。
D、加以适当的议论、抒情，升华主题。
E、写完以后多读几遍，用自己的阅读感受来检验语言是否通顺畅达。
（3）、（讨论）明确好的记叙文应该具备的艺术特征：
A：人物事件要典型
B：叙事详略要得当
C：叙事曲折有层次
D：感情升华要到位
（4）、在理解了记叙文的文体特点与艺术特征后，进行写作实践。介绍相关写作技巧。 （提问）如何将记叙文写好？（答）在这里是有技法的。
如：叙述方法（顺序、倒叙、插叙）
细节描写
修辞的使用
语言运用（新闻联播的语言很干净，没有一句废话）
议论抒情感情的控制
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对于写作中技法的运用鼓励学生可以尝试，写出后大声朗读，自己品味其表达效果
【教学后记】
根据学生课堂、写作实训反馈情况及时做好辅导。
2015年中考满分作文（写人篇）集锦
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